雅思10大“见官死”写作开头,真正的高分作文应该怎样写?


来源:   时间:2018-12-07 09:40:30

看到这个标题是不是就感觉膝盖中了一枪……
这篇文章总结了一些常见的错误……
看看就好,别背这些啊…………
坑已经告诉你了,再往里面跳就是你的不对了……
 

见官死”开头之一:云里雾里 废话连篇

Topic 1-Should college students be allowed to get married?
This topic is very interesting. I’m very interested in talking about thistopic. Because I’m also a college student and I’m not married……
 
Topic 2-Will modern technology, such as the Internet, ever replace the bookor the writing word as the sole source of information? (雅思真题)
Ok, this topic is a very good topic. First, let me tell you a story: I havea friend, he likes go on the internet very much. Every day, he uses internet toread news or play internet games. So we can see the internet is more and moreimportant in our daily life.
 
Topic 3-The importance of environmental protection
Oh, this topic is surely very important. Isn’t it? Of course! It’s reallyvery very important!
 
见官死”开头之二:中式英文人见人晕
Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life
In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart floweropened angrily……
 
Topic 2- The population problem
The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the citycenters of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there.
 
Topic3- Is there fairness in today’s business world?
I think in today’s society, there is no fairness in the business world. Forexample, I always chopped when I go out buy things……
 
Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person
Being a nice person have many advantage. I believe if a people always dobad things, he will get “baoying”.
 

见官死”开头之三:观点模糊态度暧昧

Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?
I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little,only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……
 

见官死”开头之四:偏离主题无轨电车

Topic-It is said that nowadays one can not acquire thequalifications and quality essential to success through university education. Towhat extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? (雅思真题)
I think to success, we must have a lot of importantqualities. To havethese important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English,music tools, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, ourfriends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places.
 

见官死”开头之五:语法错误惨不忍睹

Topic-If children behave badly, should their parents acceptresponsibility and also be punished? (雅思真题)
About this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents arenot right. Because teach child is parent’s responsibility. So we also punishparents too besides children is also should.
 

见官死”开头之六:过分简单没有重点

Topic-The importance of environmental protection
This issue is surely very important, let’s talk about it!
 

见官死”开头之七:用词不当 表达不准

Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?
I think college students should not be allowed to get married because theyare very young and so we can’t take the responsibility to form a family.
 

见官死”开头之八:意思重复原地踏步

Topic-Your opinion on DINK families
My opinion on DINK families is that DINK families is not a good thing. Andit is a bad thing. It brings no benefits to our society and it is even sometimesharmful to our society.
 

见官死”开头之九:中国俗语胡乱翻译

Topic 1-Is it good to have a large family?
I think it is good to have a large family. Because we Chinese believe asentence: “Many sons, many lucks”……
 
Topic 2 -Should we pretend to know everything or admit our ignorance?
We all know, our Chinese old fathers and grandfathers said: “Know is know,don’t know is don’t know”……
 
Topic 3- Do you think one’s character is greatly influenced by his/herfamily?
Chinese old words says very good: Dragon born dragon, phoenix born phoenix,rat’s son can make hole……
 
Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person
I believe one sentence:“A good person is all life safe”. We Chinese peoplealways say: “Good has good pay, bad has bad pay”.
 

见官死”开头之十: 观点武断 态度强硬 

Topic1-The importance of confidence
In my opinion, confidence is the most important thing for a person. All thesuccessful people in the world are full of confidence. While those people whodon’t have confidence, they all have failed.
 
Topic 2 - The solution to the traffic problem
I think to solve the traffic problem, very easy! For those who don’t obey the traffic rules, we should put all of them into prison. If we do that, I’msure there will be no traffic problem any more.
 
要想得高分,我们除了写好开头以外,还要快速理清作文思路,搭建好整体的逻辑架构,所以我们要将议论文写得层次分明,条理清晰是需要下一番功夫去练习的。有时候你明明逻辑很不错,但就是不知道怎么活用。
 
今天沃邦教育就给大家带来一道重要的议论文题目来举例,来带我们看看议论文该怎么去写。非常实用的干货,可以收藏学习起来。
 
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给大家讲解文章逻辑结构的题目选自剑桥系列丛书中最重要的题目之一:
In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this. (某事件利弊探讨)
 
此题讨论的问题是著名的“间隔年”,学生中学毕业后是否应该take a year off?
 
参考范文一:侧重支持taking a gap year
It is quite common these days for young people in many countries to have a break from studying after graduating from high school. The trend is not restricted to rich students (who have the money to travel), but is并列谓语 also evident among poorer students (who choose to work and become economically independent for a period of time).具象思维Generally, I think that this practice could lead to many desirable results.
 
立论段:
The reasons for this trend may involve the recognition that同位语从句 a young adult who passes directly from school to university is rather restricted in terms of general knowledge and experience of the world. By contrast, those who have spent some time earning a living or travelling to other places, have a broader view of life and better personal resources to draw on. They tend to be more independent, which is a very important factor in academic study and research, as well as giving them an advantage in terms of coping with the challenges of students life.
 
Outline:
1)general knowledge and experience of the world
have a broader view of life and better personal resources to draw on
2)tend to be more independent
a very important factor in academic study and research
giving them an advantage in terms of coping with the challenges of students life
give sb. an edge/advantage in sth. 给某人某方面的优势
 
驳论段:
However, there are certainly dangers in taking time off at that important age. Young adults may end up never returning to their studies or finding it difficult to readapt to an academic environment. They may think that it is better to continue in a particular job, or to do something completely different from a university course. But overall, I think it is less likely today, when academic qualifications文凭 are essential for getting a reasonable career.
 
My view is that young people should be encouraged to broaden their horizons. That is the best way for them to get a clear perspective of what they are hoping to do with their lives and why. Students with such a perspective are usually the most effective and motivated ones and并列句 taking a year off may be the best way to gain this.
 
本文是考官满分范文,建议6-7分学员认真学习蓝色部分内容。
 
分析:
 
有选择、有侧重的逻辑结构:
第一段:用简洁的语言直接引出讨论,学生无论贫富都可以选择take a gap year。写作开头简洁很重要。如果用看似华丽的套句会给人模板的感觉导致低分。
第二段:立论段:对比直接论证选择take the gap year学生更有优势。本段是议论文写作提出支持文章中心观点的分论点,并对其进行有效支持和扩展的部分,属于主要得分段落。
第三段:驳论段:先让步,说选择gap year的学生会面临的影响,但是又说明这种影响很容易避免,从而进一步论证自己的观点。一个优秀的考生除了能够使用恰当的论据支持自己的观点外,还必须能对自己相反的观点进行有效评价。
第四段:表明文章中心观点,倾向支持学生take the gap year。再次强调重要性。
 
关于这篇范文分析完毕,同学们对照着老师的分段分析可以进行其他范文的试答,相信会有不一样的收获。
 
-总结文章的论证,并且得出结论,再次表明文章批判性的中立观点。


-适当对文章的论证进行扩展和升华,可再次强调文章为何持有批判性中立观点,但切忌引入新观点和内容。
 
其实不难发现雅思写作其实是有套路的,12月11日19:30沃邦周老师《雅思写作年度分析讲座》教你如何写好作文,写作高分不是梦

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